Vision Aqua

[-Serenity-]

The following poem was written by a boy in my class (with a lil help from ME). Anywayz, I'd like ya all to take the time and write a short summary....lemme see HOW u understand and enterpret it...

 

VISION AQUA

 

It was a transparent round world of aqua,

with rainbow colors redefining it's ratio,

fine morning falling from green hearts,

leaving everything to dream on it's own,

and creating an aqueous medium in feelings:

When no one minds, it burst into tiny creations around.

When the next drop migrates, another height is decreased,

and after a few thoughts snatched, that also disappears.

The crystal maze in the aqua remains a secret,

relieving the three dimensional infra-structure contentful.

It's shining thoughts glittering along the crystallised track.

Forget the great world behind it, transparency does matter.

With the future constituents we travel a long way,

through imaginary pathways the future is shown vaguely,

...making epic out of spectroscience...

.........the dim light brightens to a new future.....

................tightened by copper screws.....

-aqua believes the coming future !!

[-Serenity-]

Here's a BEAUTIFUL POEM and I dont see any1 even reading it.

I honestly went thru it numerous timez, made plenty of corrections etc etc .... n no appreciation

[Pujah.]

cool poem Athena ......now feeling any betta

 

seriously I didn't understand what it was talking about....made me lil :confused:

[Paragon]

^^^ I don't get it too! The poem flows are such:

 

VISION AQUA

 

It was a transparent round world of aqua,

with rainbow colors redefining it's ratio,

fine morning falling from green hearts,

leaving everything to dream on it's own,

and creating an aqueous medium in feelings:

When no one minds, it burst into tiny creations around.

When the next drop migrates, another height is decreased,

and after a few thoughts snatched, that also disappears.

The crystal maze in the aqua remains a secret,

relieving the three dimensional infra-structure contentful.

It's shining thoughts glittering along the crystallised track.

Forget the great world behind it, transparency does matter.

With the future constituents we travel a long way,

through imaginary pathways the future is shown vaguely,

...making epic out of spectroscience...

.........the dim light brightens to a new future.....

................tightened by copper screws.....

-aqua believes the coming future !!

The problem is I can notice the description of a vision but not a conveyed message!

 

Originally by 7 of 9: Here's a BEAUTIFUL POEM and I dont see any1 even reading it.

I honestly went thru it numerous timez, made plenty of corrections etc etc .... n no appreciation

What is the poem about?

[IL CAPO]

Nice One 7 of 9.

Peace.

[NGONGE]

lol@J11

 

He shoots, he scores

He keeps making goals

The stadium is almost empty

Nobody was there to watch

He shot away a volley

And hoped it’ll win the “matchâ€

The shot swerved to the left

It then swerved to the right

But before we saw the goal

Someone extinguished the light

We sit and wait with anguish

And a little suppressed delight

To see if it hit its target

Or caused a little fright

In any case it’s funny to witness such a “fightâ€

The suspense keeps increasing

How long for the second “part�

 

[- Femme -]

:confused: I dont get it either. Please explian the meaning of the poem.

[Paragon]

NGONGE loool Funny one.

 

And where did this game take place?

[raula]

me too :confused: ATHENA..that just tells us how perplexed your cranium is-and plz stop inclining kids to science fiction(and the "outer limits") -kidding..ok gal dont get mad :rolleyes:

[NGONGE]

lol@J

 

Now to explain this poem:

 

*** Drivel mode switched on ***

 

This poem is all about water and how it flows through us, around us, over us and under us like one big maze that even though we know off still remains a secret. Aqua sustains life, the lives of those here and those in the future (even though it’s transparent).

 

*** Drivel mode switched off ***

 

Or of course it could be all about the Barbie Girl.

[OG_Girl]

the original poster posted this poem @ June 18, 2002 , more than 2 years ago and some one brought it up for some thing " fe nafs ya'aqoob" ... :confused:

 

<--- shaking my head and leaves the room .

 

Salam

[-Serenity-]

LOL@Jamaal..is this an attemp to really understand the poem or..er..dare I say, take the heat off your little friend? . A little too predictable, arent you?

[Paragon]

NGONGE, thankx for the explanation sxb. Now i have an idea what the poem may mean. No more questions :

 

Ah! 7 of 9, being alittle presumptuous, aren't we? Don't worry, you can experiment on assumptions.

[-Serenity-]

^^ Alrite, lemme take a wild guess - you suddenly remembered this poem and wanted to read it and know its meaning?

 

Maybe you just recalled the best poem you ever read here and this sprung to mind?

 

Or maybe you remembered I was once into poetry in my younger days and wanted to take me down memory lane?

 

:eek:

 

Come on brother...help me out here... why did u excavate this from the bottom of the heap - 2day?

[sheherazade]

The Poetry section is the place to be. Scandal after scandal. So entertaining.

 

Oh well, get it out of the system b4 Ramadan.