THE PICTURE IN MY DREAMS

[T.K]

Late at night when I'm in bed

What seems like a picture begins in my head.

And as my eyes begin to shut,

My body feels as it is fluttering up.

Then as amazing as it seems,

The picture becomes clearer and clearer in my dreams.

 

But what does the picture hold?

I still can't make it out.

But as it begins to unfold,

I know there is no doubt.

 

It's a picture of a man and a woman standing side by side,

With happiness in their eyes.

But suddenly the picture comes to a stop.

Then the man looks like me,

The woman I still can't make out.

But how can this be?

Everything was going right and I was going to see

The woman I loved and was going to be with for eternity.

 

The picture isn't coming out and I guess I will have to wait and see

To find out who the woman is standing next to me.

For maybe we might get together and I hope this dream comes true.

 

But now I know I won't have to wait for her;

Because the woman in my arms is you. :cool:

[Mujahida]

Excellent poem

I enjoyed reading it.

Well done.

 

salamat

[Baby Boy]

i got a little somthing for yall so check it out:

 

I love you not only for what you are,

but for what I am when I am with you.

I will stand beside you as your partner,

I will stand before you as your protector,

And I will stand behind you as your solace.

Please spend and end your life with me.

 

let me know what yall think if yall like it i'll send some more

[Soma_chick]

That was a tight poem T.K and not bad Baby Boy. Keep yo skillz aight

[Hibo]

oooooi

[SafiaLuuL612]

T.K., YO I WAS TOTALLY FEELIN' YOUR POEM, I THINK EVERYBODY CAN RELATE TO THAT, EXCEPT THE LAST TWO LINES AT THE END. I THINK THAT SHOULD BE CUT, CUZ YOU THROW THE WHOLE "SEARCHING" THEME OF THE POEM OFF(NO HATING, JUST CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICIZM). BUT SERIOUSLY I WAS LOVING IT.

 

AND BABY BOY, I LIKE WHERE YOU WAS GOING WITH POEM AND ALL, BUT IT NEEDS TO BE A LITTLE BIT LONGER AND HAVE LITTLE MORE DEEPNESS TO IT. CONTINUE THE POEM WHERE IT ENDS.

 

LOVE YALL!!

 

SAFIA*********